Advice please

[TheSpleen]

Here is the basic screen.

I am asking for any advice to make it that much better.

Lens flares maybe?

title9.mov

I did try making shadows wiggle but it looked like dung

[largento]

Maybe you could animate the light that's casting the shadows from the title? The lack of movement in that lower area is a little distracting.

[John Bigboote]

Very cool. DIG the meteor-or sun...like the moving shadow idea. Was the sun a johnl3d experiment?

[Fuchur]

Very cool. DIG the meteor-or sun...like the moving shadow idea. Was the sun a johnl3d experiment?

 

Looks more like the explosion-project of the data-folder/cd to me.

 

*Fuchur*

[TheSpleen]

Very cool. DIG the meteor-or sun...like the moving shadow idea. Was the sun a johnl3d experiment?

the sun is entirely my creation

[TheSpleen]

Very cool. DIG the meteor-or sun...like the moving shadow idea. Was the sun a johnl3d experiment?

 

Looks more like the explosion-project of the data-folder/cd to me.

 

*Fuchur*

Thats where I got the sprites

[TheSpleen]

Maybe you could animate the light that's casting the shadows from the title? The lack of movement in that lower area is a little distracting.

Ok gonna try that

[TheSpleen]

perhaps dark siloughettes of the pyramids in distance?

(bad spelling)

[TheSpleen]

titlescreen3.mov

better?

[Gerry]

Definitely better, but I think the text should be moving somehow. I had a long elaborate solution in mind but decided not to complicate your life!

 

It's also not clear if that's the sun or a meteor, and if it's supposed to be moving. Why not have it start small and fly right into the camera lens? Unless I'm misreading your intent.

[TheSpleen]

Definitely better, but I think the text should be moving somehow. I had a long elaborate solution in mind but decided not to complicate your life!

 

It's also not clear if that's the sun or a meteor, and if it's supposed to be moving. Why not have it start small and fly right into the camera lens? Unless I'm misreading your intent.

It is supposed to be a very hot desert sun.

[Gerry]

It's not reading that way. It shouldn't be dark in the middle or be morphing shapes. My recommendation would be to make it perfectly round, blinding white, and all the heat/radiation effects should be external to the disc.

 

when I was a kid I would stare into the sun for the simple reason that grownups said not to. After a minute or so I would see a "corkscrew" effect like the white disc of the sun was unscrewing from the sky. that's the effect I would go for!

 

Also check out my timelapse sunset: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2YFd_Vqadcs A hot desert sun would be even more intense than that.

 

EDIT: Also the lettering should be shadowed on the front, with a highlit top edge.

[TheSpleen]

titlescreenbird4.mov

[TheSpleen]

I think that last one is the one I will go with.

[TheSpleen]

It's not reading that way. It shouldn't be dark in the middle or be morphing shapes. My recommendation would be to make it perfectly round, blinding white, and all the heat/radiation effects should be external to the disc.

 

when I was a kid I would stare into the sun for the simple reason that grownups said not to. After a minute or so I would see a "corkscrew" effect like the white disc of the sun was unscrewing from the sky. that's the effect I would go for!

 

Also check out my timelapse sunset: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2YFd_Vqadcs A hot desert sun would be even more intense than that.

 

EDIT: Also the lettering should be shadowed on the front, with a highlit top edge.

All your points are valid.

I had to light the letters from the front so you could see them.

At first they were in shadow but not legible.

The sun? I am creating a cartoon world, and the flaming ball seems to make a great gag.

Anyway I made the sun much smaller and changed everything.

See my latest.

Thanks Gerry.

 

Gene

[kwhitaker]

I think your titlescreen looks great, the bird is a cool touch