I'm going down the list of comments here and thinking I sure can't think of any constructive advice -- in fact WHO COULD after all this is Brian Prince then I come to Yves -- yep! the one person that could actually make some valuable suggestions --
The whole scene is so photo-real that I smacked myself to make sure I was real. I like the last render the best, probably that left to right writing thing, but it sure flows better for me. Really excellent picture!