jpiazzo

Hey Rodney, Thanks for such a fast critique - it is all welcome. Feel free to email me anything else at my address (on the cover page). I'm with you on alot of what you said. After I collect some feedback I plan to do another draft. Milly's story is at the top of the list. I think I want to SEE her adventures a bit more, rather than just hear about them. I like your rescue scene idea. Over all building the proper climax at the end, is well what it's all about! Plans??? - I won't post specifics here, because I know that would turn this thread into a "that can, or can't be done" kind of thing. Lets just say that every script dreams of being a movie. JP

Hi everyone, Here is a draft for a Animated Feature Screenplay I am working on. I am about to start a new revision so if anyone has the time to read this - I would welcome comments. HADIS_CURE.pdf

Thanks for the encouragement! My original face mask, eyes and face were alot lighter in splines. Then I added the mouth - OK, the mouth area needs detail. Then I tried to turn the face into a nice round head - OH BOY! Then I modeled the ears and attached them...thats when things got messy. I am really glad you all like the overall look though - I was going for cute and sympathetic - the poor bear, after all, he spent most of his life, in my story, wired to the front grill of a garbage truck as a hood ornament! JP

Hi everyone, This is my first attempt at modeling anything like a face. I think I have to many splines, probably all in the wrong place. Things really got away from me when I attached the ears. Can I improve on what I have, or should I start from scratch again. I really learned alot just getting here! JP

and as a complete newbie - I responded to the 1st page of the thread... SORRY - the arms look fine! JP

From a complete newbie - who is absolute awe! IMHO the forearms seem a bit long. JP