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KenH

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  1. I wonder what the goo did to Gloria then? And what is her motivation for crying? If she doesn't want to be there, she could run away as she's not tied up. Ah....if only we had a director. ;)

     

    But anyway, are the bolts of lightening in this scene or not? If they are, then Tinman is too late. A script error?

    WITCH smiles, (slow motion).

     

    BOLTS OF LIGHTNING flow from WITCH's fingertips, (slow

    motion).

     

    BOLT OF LIGHTNING reaches and surrounds GLORIA, (slow

    motion).

     

    BOLT OF LIGHTING approaches GOOGLY GOO, (slow motion)...

  2. The "brow blinking" of SC in the beginning is a little distracting. He's doing it too much I think. And is Gloria crying? She's in a trance and so doesn't care about anything enough to cry about it.

    Yeah, the sound sounds tinny? I how it slows down in the end though. However, it could be a little long on the last camera angle.

    Nice going on the rest.

  3. Everything from that shot to the end of the scene is supposed to be slow motion. Can you think of anything I can do to make sure the audience interprets it as Slow Motion instead of just bad timing?

     

    Ooooh. Maybe adding a slow anticipation to trot would give that impression. And perhaps the frame rate could be dropped to give it a more jerky motion. See here for some funny slow mo...

     

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e2QAGVMlns4

  4. There may be some grunts required for grasshopper Bill when he lifts the bucket and drops it. If you need them just give me a shout. Also, the bucket probably should hit Tinman on the body because he can still talk in later scenes ie his jaw hasn't seized up.

  5. I think that works better. I assume the King says "Let the spell commence!" or something in the previous scene so people know that's what it is. Also, when Trot shows her ass, is she jumping while in that pose? Quite an athlete. ;)

  6. The crowd isn't in the way. They are behind a line of guards watching the scene. If they were milling all around Gloria, Goo and SC, I think I would probably go nuts. Crowd scenes are a real PITA.

     

    I know they're not in the way, but that's the magic of movies. :) We can make the audience believe it. Camera on Witch saying it. It's not a biggie, but it might be a little character development (witch's sense of self importance) and make it clearer that the view must be clear for the spell to work.

     

    Nancy, I agree with Myron on some of the stuff. Sometimes, the accent gets a little too French. :D

  7. Maaaybe if you want, the witch could demand the crowd to move out of the way so she can see googly and Gloria. That's all.

     

    Also, if you want to go all out, witch really should be making an entrance. She could arrive in on her broom. But that's only if you're feeling particularly energetic. :)

  8. Good start on a difficult sequence.

     

    I wonder if some incantation from witchy would make things clearer?

     

    There definitely needs to be some reaction/rushing shots of trot in there. If only for the first few tries. Maybe there could be a view behind witch to see what she's aiming at.

     

    To set it up, perhaps if the first camera moved out from SC to show the relation ship of the other characters around him. Then cut to Witch. And Trot needs to be seen in the setup shots. I assume she would be being held by a guard. Maybe she could kick him in the shin and run.....could add some fun with the guard trying to stop her......queue Benny Hill music. :)

  9. That's cool. Just a little thing....in the last shot, Trot is very still. I think a little head movement or a blink would make it. Though I didn't see it the first time. It all depends on where the viewer is looking! :D

  10. I think breaking up the journey to witches house would add more tension and she is making the goo for Gloria after all. If need be, we could find some animals to be guinea pigs for her.....eg black cat, crow, rat, flying broom, etc.

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