kwhitaker Posted October 23, 2008 Share Posted October 23, 2008 As a amateur animator everything seems to be a work in progress, with never being satisfied, This will make my third attempt with this next segment, I would like to introduce Onton a dark elf and his best friend Dracolleen. comments welcome Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
martin Posted October 25, 2008 Share Posted October 25, 2008 Very good character. You may need to do a narrator over the top - I think it would take the pressure off of the animation to tell the whole story. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hash Fellow robcat2075 Posted October 25, 2008 Hash Fellow Share Posted October 25, 2008 Hey those are good looking toon renders. One suggestion I'd note is the skies in the background are maybe too flat. It makes them look too close to me. Maybe they need a cloud or a gradient or something to help distance them. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwhitaker Posted October 25, 2008 Author Share Posted October 25, 2008 Very good character. You may need to do a narrator over the top - I think it would take the pressure off of the animation to tell the whole story. A narrator could be a option, it wasn't what I had in mind, but it's something to consider there are a couple of key segments that have not been shown, because there're still being worked on. As the characters meet, the story should unfold, hopefully, . Thanks Martin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kwhitaker Posted October 26, 2008 Author Share Posted October 26, 2008 Hey those are good looking toon renders. One suggestion I'd note is the skies in the background are maybe too flat. It makes them look too close to me. Maybe they need a cloud or a gradient or something to help distance them. I'm re-rending part of the last segment again, and I added a sky. Thanks robcat. for your good advise, it dose look better Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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